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Feedback: Am I vague enough?

Hello audience!

I'm speaking to you not as a writer, but as a person who happens to write for now.

Am I effectively vague?

Do you know who I'm talking about when I say I'm quite fond of them?

Unless you have the luxury of being privy to my emotions ( and most of you don't )

you should be unaware of who I am referring to, specifically, in my self-indulgent poetry.

I know exactly who I'm talking about

I just don't want him to know who he is

if he's reading at all ( highly doubtful )

unless he wants it to be him you see...

And no, I'm not going to tell him.

That would just be stupid...


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